Flash Fiction Challenge: The Sounds of Marina Bay
Chuck Wendig's challenge this week was to write a piece of flash fiction inspired by a photo, and the picture I've used is this:
I slightly overshot the word count, but since I don't have time to edit it down, here's my 1200 word flash fiction, The Sounds of Marina Bay
Marina Bay wasn't pretty, but it was lively. Jon liked to walk there, especially in the
afternoon, when the kids were out of school and groups of them huddled on the
steps, drinking, or chased down the sidewalks on skateboards and motor
scooters. Sometimes you had to be quick
to dodge the teens on their quirky, not quite legal, vehicles; even the hulking
great picnic tables on wheels seemed to have a knack of appearing silently out
of nowhere.
This particular Thursday afternoon, Jon had ducked out of
his PhD research, promising himself he'd make it up later, because hell, you
could research when it was dark, but walking the streets in the dark was both
less fun and more dangerous. He was
outside the cinema, the big modern bubble bding with its shell-like shape that
was supposed to funnel the sound in all the right ways to create the perfect
acoustics, when it happened. Maybe it
happened because he was watching the sun sink behind the bubble and observing
the way the light reflected off the curves, instead of watching his feet. Maybe it happened because he was thinking too
much about his research project, and the likelihood of getting enough MRI time
and enough volunteers to get to the bottom of the anomaly he'd noticed
regarding the part of the brain that activated when listening to voices, and
the way that, in some people, it seemed to become active even when another of
his volunteers attempted to 'think loudly' at them.
Whatever the reason, he didn't spot the pony-tailed girl
wobbling towards him, despite the flashing neon on her wheels, and when he did,
he moved to one side without looking.
And stumbled. And fell. Towards the road.
Afterwards, he couldn't remember the car hitting him, though
he did remember realising what must have happened when he awoke in the hospital
with bandages round his head. For a
moment, he thought he was blind, or had bandaged eyes, but then he realised the
room was just dark, and the bandages only covered his crown and ears.
The room was silent. He looked around and the darkness
resolved itself into the faint glow of the heart rate monitor beside his bed,
its sinuous curve scrolling across the screen, peaking and troughing like the
waves of the sea.
Didn't those things normally beep? Jon was sure they did. And when the sun rose and the nurse came in
with a tray of lumpy porridge and pills in a little plastic cup, she also came
silently. And then, as she approached
the bed, her neat blonde bob swinging as she moved, he finally began to hear
her voice.
"He's awake now.
I wonder if he knows it's been three days. I shouldn't tell him, the doctor will be
coming soon to talk to him, tell him about the auditory nerves, but he looked
like a smart guy, well apart from all the blood, I think he knows something is
off."
Jon did. He could
hear her voice, but her lips weren't moving.
And her voice wasn't exactly in his ears, it was more as if it was
arriving somewhere inside his head.
"I need to get an MRI on this." He said the words out loud, he thought, but
heard nothing. The nurse turned her head
towards him, though, and this time it was the other way around: her lips moved
but he heard nothing.
He remembered the words she'd used: auditory nerves. Had the crash damaged his hearing? Presumably.
But it seemed to have left him with something else.
When she realised what she'd done, her shout of remorse
echoed through his head. She looked far
too sweet and innocent, with her rosy cheeks and blue eyes, to be using the
language that landed in his mind. He was
interested to observe that her inner voice, as he'd begun to think of it, had a
discernible accent: Aussie, maybe, or New Zealand, and he wondered if it was
the same as, or distinct from, her external voice.
Her lips moved, and he judged from the wide open mouth and
flexing vocal chords that she'd shouted, though he heard nothing.
The chatter in her mind went on, and he learned that she'd
called for a doctor, and she hoped it would be the charming Doctor Singh who
answered her call rather than his grumpier colleague, Doctor Collins, whose
bedside manner was distinctly suspect.
Then another voice joined the chatter.
Jon was momentarily confused, wondering who was mumbling
about the expectation that doctors would fulfil so many roles: medics, administrators
and counsellors. A moment later a lanky,
balding guy, nearly as white as his coat, came through the door. Doctor
Collins, then.
Since Jon couldn't hear, the doctor had brought a pad and
pen with him and proceeded to write notes explaining the situation, though Jon
had to smirk as he squinted at the near-illegible writing, all the while
listening to the Doctor's mental monologue.
With the nurse's still going too, Jon was getting a little confused. It was like being in a noisy pub, with the
conversation at the next table overshadowing the one you were actually
interested in.
He nodded and shook his head - gently, because he still had
one hell of an ache from the crash - in response to the Doctor's scribbled
messages.
And yes, he nodded, he felt well enough to see a visitor,
though he couldn't imagine who was visiting.
His family were half a continent away, so presumably someone from the
lab.
And indeed, his lab partner walked in, smiling nervously as
she carried on an interior monologue, trying to make herself act cheerfully as
she took in the damage. Hell, she was a
scientist, shouldn't she be able to take a few incisions and abrasions in her
stride?
She hadn't yet figured out what to do about his hearing
loss, though, since the doctor suggested it was likely to be complete and
presumably it was too early days for him to have sussed lipreading.
And he could hardly tell her that he could hear everything
she was thinking, so he let his eyelids droop closed and sat in silence until
she retreated, taking her tiresomely self-centred thoughts with her.
As the day went on, Jon's new sense seemed to become keener,
so that he was hearing thoughts from the rooms next door, down the corridor,
and eventually even the busy cafeteria below. The chatter was exhausting, and
since the hospital was a 24/7 operation, he couldn't even wait for it all to
turn off so he could go to sleep.
Finally, in desperation, he unclipped himself from the
monitor and headed outside, dodging in and out of lifts and doorways whenever
he heard some thoughts approaching, until he reached the open street. Even there, though, he found he could hear
the thoughts of drivers passing, and the occupants of the high rise apartments
he walked by. He put his hands over his
ears, but it made no difference.
By the marina, it was a little easier. Thoughts assailed him only from one side, and
he turned with relief to the silent sea.
The water was dark and cold and still and silent, and he hardly
hesitated before stepping off the dock into one of the small dinghies, and
unhitching it from the pier. He didn't
have the keys, so he just pushed away from the jetty and paddled with the small
oar he found under the seat, until eventually, mercifully, the voices faded. Then he curled up, rocked by the silent waves,
and hearing nothing more than the tiny rustle of fish thinking of plankton and
predators, he slept.
I like how you managed to develop the main character so quick that when the revelation about his condition came about my eyebrows involuntarily lifted and I said out loud "Ooh! I get it!"
ReplyDeleteWhich is rare for me.
To get things that is.
Well done.
Hey, thanks! Although from what I've read of yours, you don't strike me as someone who's slow to get it!
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