Sneak Peek Sunday: my work in progress
In my last post about characters, I mentioned 'Desperate Measures', my work in progress which is a sequel to my first novella, 'Desperate Bid'. In it, the heroine finds herself alone in the hero's office, indulging in an irresistible moment of nosiness. This is that moment...
That's six paragraphs, as per the rules of Sneak Peek Sunday, of a very early draft of 'Desperate Measures.' The final version will almost certainly bear no resemblance to this at all! While I'm redrafting, why don't you hop over to the Sneak Peek Sunday site and see if any of the other teasers appeal?
Miles' desk was tidy, so
tidy that Michelle could have wondered if he ever worked, to sully it, if she
had not already known the answer. He worked harder than anyone she had ever
known. His desk was indeed, as a tidy desk is said to be, the sign of an ordered mind.
There was just one letter, lying dead
centre. It was handwritten, in a looping old-fashioned hand, and although
Michelle did not intend to read it, she found she'd become absorbed by the
first sentence. "There is no easy way to say this."
There never was. Nowadays, you didn't
write, not in pen, if there was an easier way to say it.
"Your father has been diagnosed with
cancer. They say it is inoperable. Miles, if you are ever going to come back,
come now."
Michelle meant to
leave, truly she did, but she found herself instead sitting in his chair,
mechanically twirling his propelling pencil, and wondering what it was like not
to have been back for so long that your mother would ask the question in that
way: 'If you are ever going to come back.' His mother wasn't certain her son
would ever return. He was a stranger to her, a stranger to his family. Did anybody
know him?
Michelle
found herself opening and shutting drawers, not sure what she was looking for.
In the top drawer, she found the predictable array of stationery and
correspondence. In the bottom drawer were two apples, a bag of pistachios, and
a tennis ball signed in marker pen. That's six paragraphs, as per the rules of Sneak Peek Sunday, of a very early draft of 'Desperate Measures.' The final version will almost certainly bear no resemblance to this at all! While I'm redrafting, why don't you hop over to the Sneak Peek Sunday site and see if any of the other teasers appeal?
Whether it changes or not, you've set up a most interesting premise, Stephanie. Definitely makes me want to know more about these characters.
ReplyDeleteThere are so many ways that "There's no easy way to say this" could have gone and I did not see that way coming at all. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, both of you! It's always nervewracking unleashing a story on the world for the first time, so your encouragement is appreciated.
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